Query: Saving Eden

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I wrote a book. It’s called Saving Eden. I will not post the entire thing on here (its 40,000 pages long!). I will, however, post my query letter that I sent to agents. The one that got me a collection of polite rejection letters and one… possible…match. You see, Agent. Cali (not her real name) says it sounds interesting, but is a little short for a YA novel. Still, she wants me to send her a synopsis and the first 10 pages. The thing is I have no ideal how to write a synopsis. I will post it on here after I figure it out, but for now here is my Awsome Query Letter (it deserves caps).

Query: Saving Eden

Dear Agent. Cali,

Imagine living your whole life separated from the rest of the world. The only other face you’ve ever seen is your father, and he’s not giving you any clues to what life is like on the outside. What would happen to you if you suddenly found yourself in the middle of a big city, surrounded by strange and wonderful people? Is it possible that the real question should be what would happen to the people?

In my young adult novel Saving Eden, which is 40,500 words long, fifteen-year-old Angela has spent her entire life trapped inside the confinements of paradise. The only other person she has ever seen is her father, who built their home by hand and tends their beautiful garden daily. It’s the year 2201 and all that is about to change when Angela discovers Jessie, a seventeen-year-old boy from Chicago, sitting in the mist of her garden. Jessie is a member of a secret organization determined to stop The Amenders, which is a group of people who have recently taken over the American government. Angela runs away with him to help save a world that she always wanted to see but never had a chance to know. When Angela discovers the reason behind her secluded life she realizes she may have caused her father, her new friends, and herself to be in more danger than she could ever imagine.

After seeing the books you’ve represented like Super-Awsome-Book, which I have read myself in the past, I think you might be interested in representing Saving Eden as well as the many books I plan for the future.

I believe I should tell you a little about me. My name is "words-over-numbers" and I am a Ball State University student majoring in journalism with a minor in creative writing. I live in Indianapolis, IN and I have had a love for literature since I was a child. Though I have some journalistic articles published in The Indianapolis Star and The Indianapolis Recorder, this is the first fiction novel I have written that I feel deserves to be seen by the world.

The full manuscript is available at your request. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,
words-over-numbers